after dark

the sun hadnot shown in entirety. but its rays still reached her. they filled the air with mellow light. in the serene yellow, the water of the pond was still black. there were silent ripples. a shrub of hibiscus tilted on the water, like a lover. ripe flowers of the color of blood, dropped into the water. one after the other. killing themselves. there sat a girl on the stairs. never as conscious as then. a moment later a pale sun showed itself. a peace descended on her mind. she got up. one could see the joints of her bones undoing themselves. she stepped into the water. tip-toed one step down. she looked at her feet under the black water. their outlines moved precariously with the waves that formed. then she looked up front. at the bank, opposite. one more step down, she paused for one moment. and looked back, at the world.

then she walked away. deeper into the water..


10 comments:

ani_aset said...

wow lovely wildflower :) loved it. too dark

aria said...

"a shrub of hibiscus tilted on the water, like a lover."

some wonderful lines there.. the one I quoted is my favorite ..
deliciously morbid. Loved it.

Tamsin said...

i love dat line too.. wat extent of a parallel does it take to think of that!
love ur words and ur style..
kas

Tamsin said...

i adore that line too..wat extent of imagination does it take to come up with something like that!

love ur words and ur style.. kas

wildflower said...

@ ani--
tnx ..

@ aria
while i was writin this i thot it cud be obscene to include that line..but ..somehow i thank my instinct now for not havin left it behind then. thankyou :)

@ kas
i loved both the 'parallel' and 'imagination'.. so here they are :P
thnx yaa..

................your's entirely said...

how stunning is that...!?

wildflower said...

is tht a ques mark! if it is..then proly i din quite get yu ..

................your's entirely said...

...I was so overwhelmed by it that I din't see myself putting that '?'....never mind ... awesome as it is... cud u just provide a brief backdrop to this stunner...a couple of lines probably...

wildflower said...

i'l leave it right here..with her walking into the water..but can yu see her face the last time she turned back? must've been bright brown..and eyes shinin with the sun's first rays..

$uch! said...

my fav post :)